How to Write an Online Dating Profile • The Opening

This is Part #2 of a series. Read Part #1 here.

My fundamental approach to profile writing is to show not tell. This means demonstrating who you are by what you do. The opening paragraph has three parts – the setup + the problem + the fix.

#1 The Opening Statement • the setup

We are going to leave behind sentences that start with “I am …”, “I love…” or “I enjoy…” and look at things from a different perspective. Instead of writing about yourself, write from someone else’s point of view.

→ My friends call me adventurous/crazy/brave/cheeky etc. because I …  (subtext – my friends are important)

→ My parents used to call me Wonder Woman/a handful/misguided/a child prodigy etc. because I … (subtext – my family is important)

→ My boss refers to me as the head of all things/the Photoshop wizard/the smooth talker/the selling machine etc. because I … (subtext – my career is important)

Choose something that will provide the theme for the rest of your profile. The theme is the one thing you’re passionate about, the thing that gets you out of bed in the morning, the thing that you want to do with your potential partner.

Example — theme = nature

My friends [my friends are important*] call me Farmer Hoggett [from ‘Babe’ = I love movies] because I love nothing more than hanging out with my two cats, dog, chooks, rooster and ducks [I love animals + I probably don’t live in an apartment in the city]. When I’m exhausted from trying to keep this wild menagerie [I’m not totally pet obsessed] from destroying the vegetable garden [I’m a gardener] I head out bush to relax and recharge [I like connecting with nature + I lean towards being introverted].

*subtext in blue


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#2 Why Things Need to Change • the problem

The next part of the opening paragraph is to highlight something wrong with your current scenario.

→ But I’ve started to notice …

→ But I’m not very good at …

→ But I’m beginning to wonder …

Example

But I’m not very good at reading a map and my sister worries that one day I won’t be able to find my way home and she won’t have anyone to babysit her kids [I love my nieces and nephews + I’m good with kids].

#3 How Can Your Date Solve Your Problem? • the fix

The third part suggests how your potential date might help you out of your predicament. Address him/her directly and ask challenging questions which refer to the activities you enjoy. At the end, get a bit flirty.

Example

Can you steer a canoe in the right direction? Are you able to find the next foothold when you climb? Does your mountain bike have GPS? [I like canoeing, rock-climbing and cycling] And if all else fails, can you build a shelter with your bare hands and find some way to keep me warm? [Bear Grylls gets me hot!]

Is this more interesting than the old laundry list of “I am X and I’m looking for Y”? Would you keep reading?

Continued in Part #3 — The Middle.

{thank you to my anonymous reader who let me rewrite her profile}

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17 thoughts on “How to Write an Online Dating Profile • The Opening

      1. Thanks I will! My original profile back 13 years ago was really quirky and positive, full of fun. The last time I tried to do it I just failed. I think I’d gotten too cynical and it reflected in my profile haha.

        Hard to write about yourself and who/what you want when you don’t even know yourself.

      1. Katie! I’m stuck at the opening. I was able to do the headline fine. I’m on match.com and I can’t put any words together. Please help!

  1. Really great advice! I had an “I am,” “I like,” “I enjoy” profile and I met my current husband, but if I ever did it again, I’d follow this advice. I like it much better!

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